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Hear me read it

I splashed black ink onto your spine;
unintentional as I frenzied and fawned
to try and catch the elusive thought.

You patiently waited for me to return,
out of breath and triumphant, with my trophy.
We hung it on wood next to the elk.

In my haste to write of the love of you,
I'd written in you. I'd marked you as mine,
as my words intoxicated your weak heart.

The ink had permeated your flesh, your blood,
until it silted, deep inside you,
a permanent, unedited, tattoo of our love.
For RS.
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Given 2013-07-01
Tattoo by `KathrynODriscoll ( Featured by BeccaJS )
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this had a magnificent depth and seems like its strait from a deep thought process it held a lot of meaning for me personally. the originality of this was outstanding as well. very simple outside yet a complex underneath. the words were a bit more complex , and i adored it with the added effect giving this short poem an intelligent feel. the part that had the most meaning (in my experience) was " as my words intoxicated your weak heart" it kind of brought a story deeper into it maybe showing the girl is weaker and she accepts these words of afection because no one else will tell them to her. i encourage you to do more work.
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ThePlaces Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congrats for the DD :) Can you tell me the theme of the poem for me to understand better?
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013
Love, poetry, writing about someone you love and trying to capture them and how often men fall in love with me writing about them rather than with me specifically
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poetries Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
Congrats on your DD! :)
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:iconpoetryod:
PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
Thank you!! 
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
congrats on the DD
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:love: Thank you!
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spoems Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013   Writer
Congrats on the feature! I love the image of the weak heart intoxicated by words. Well done.
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:love: thank you S, you are too kind!
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SerenaVampire734 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow, really unique imagery, very cool to think about! I'm digging it :D
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
yay! Thank you Serena! :D
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Skrayle Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Professional General Artist
Oooooo, this is such a fantastic poem! Definitely ranks in my favorite poems I've read here on dA. It's short, but really good! You have a wonderful way with words :D
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
blushes, thank you so much! I'm thrilled you enjoyed this!
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Skrayle Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
No problem! :)
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013
:heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
Thank you!!
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Schneefuechsin Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Congratulations on the DD! :hug:
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
Thanks!!
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:iconpoofypo-x:
poofypo-x Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Now this is DD-worthy! :clap:
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:blush: Thank you so much! Goodness!
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:iconpoofypo-x:
poofypo-x Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
No worries! Keep working everybody would love to see more like this. :D
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
I'll try!
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NekoNekoGirl997 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Damn straight man. You deserve this.
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:love: sniffles!
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013   Writer
I enjoyed reading and listening to this beautiful poem. And the explanation behind it! Congratulations on a well deserved DD. :heart:
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:iconpoetryod:
PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:love: Thank you so much! :D
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chancerox Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
omg i thought i saw your little black & yellow lines in the DD section! yay! this is and you are so deserving of it! :heart:
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:D :D :D!! Thank you so much!! :love:
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Amazing! Congrats on the DD.
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:love:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013   General Artist
hooray! congratulations on the DD, katie darling! :squee:
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:D <3333333 thank you Sammur <333
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013   General Artist
always, always, always :heart: :heart: :heart:
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caddman Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Professional General Artist
...nice thoughts and flows well...:heart:
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:D Thank you so much!
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caddman Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Professional General Artist
...:iconmypleasuresignplz:  kathryn ...:heart:
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ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013
There are some complex images here that I really like--not exclusively positive in nature, but entirely compelling. Thanks for sharing.
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:tighthug: thank you so much :love: you are too sweet
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Ashes-and-Snowflakes Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
A daily deviation!! Congratulations!! This is one of my favorite poems, I recognized it immediately when I saw it was featured. I'm so happy for you!! :)
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
Aw, really!? I'm stunned that people like this so much. Honoured, but stunned! :love:
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Ashes-and-Snowflakes Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Really!! It's a great piece, there's so much passion in it. I've read it more than once. :D
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FixMeKnow Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013
Congrats! :la:
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:D :D Thanks!!La la la la
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incogxito Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
congratulations on the DD :love:
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
thanks!!
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SovereignSin Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Student Writer
Congratulations on the DD!
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
THANKYOUUUU
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:iconsovereignsin:
SovereignSin Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
YOU'REWELCOME
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Exnihilo-nihil Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Professional Writer
congratulations for your DD!
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
thanks!!
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Rayckro Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013
Congratulation on the Daily Deviation! :D
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