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Drowning, my lungs have collapsed,
no air within this dark night-time tragedy
as it plays out, twisting and sculpting
my anxiety into consequences of actions -
time tries to compress around my throat;
I'm choking with the grief of what I've killed.
I've killed us. Unspoken words gush
from my nose, from my wrists, they seep out
and stain the carpet as richly as any blood
we may or may not have exchanged
in our last struggle to get the last brutal word.
I tried to wound you, my skin wanted revenge
for the humming of anger and fear
rippling through the nerve endings -
I wanted you to scream and wail and die.
I did.

I did.

But now you're laying facing the window
and I'm out of your orbit and the colds setting in.
My lungs have collapsed, I'm drowning,
organ failure bubbles out my eyes and mouth
until I beg you to forgive me, I beg.
I beg and pull you towards me but your cold too
and your eyes glazed over with that
all-too-familiar eternal apathy that you knew
I wanted. You've taken it from me.
You're gone. We're gone. You're dead to me.
I roar and bite at your corpse, angry animals
claw at their victims way past the struggle.
I paw. I paw. I pause. I break. I sob -
I didn't want you to be gone. Stand up and fight!
I was angry and I said I never loved you...
but I did.

I did.

I still do.
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Inspired by moonkata84's prompt ’Start a poem with "Drowning, my lungs have collapsed,
no air within this dark night-"' over at TheWritePlace.

Considering I just released a poem about escaping abusive relationships I feel the need to let my lovely watchers know that a) this is fictional inspired by the prompt and b) it is a metaphor about pushing a relationship to its breaking point of no return and not about actually harming anyone. :rose:


The Write InspirationThe Write Inspiration
for the week of August 17th, 2015
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Hello fellow TheWritePlace members!
First of all, let's thank emptyxreturns for using our prompt to write Shaky Foundation.
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This week we can come up with an exercise. Complete the poem! 
Choose one of the following starter lines and continue writing the poem.
You may write in any form but you must use these starters at the beginning of your piece.
When complete please submit it to our prompt gallery here. 

1. from DonShugar


Play with me in the far side of heaven.
Come and dig your hand deep into my heart


2. from NemoX7


A Journey to the Moon, Armour, 
Burying Bones, Chemical, and Circuitry


3. from moonkata84


Drowning, my lungs have collaps

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davdajuhi Featured By Owner Edited Mar 10, 2017  Student Digital Artist
  splendid! Wow!  Clap
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FuneralRoseTeaParty Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2015  Student Writer
I can feel the desperation and it's hauntingly beautiful. Lovely.
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2015
:tighthug: Thanks!
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wyrmfed Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2015
An internal conversation with oneself in the throes of a successful, albeit regretted, suicide?
"I paw. I paw. I pause." Brrr. Brrr. Brilliant! Chilling!
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2015
:tighthug: Thank you!
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ilivefortoast Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
remarkable, you have a fantastic writing style!
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2015
aw, thank you!! :D I try :blush:
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mercixnekoxdoll9 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
I got chills and I could feel the tears prickling at the corners of my eyes, daring to spill. I am in love with your work. I forever will be. Now go publish a fucking book <3 :') keep doing what you do and keep being you ~mercixnekoxdoll
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2015
:giggle: I did self publish two books of poetry like 6 years ago (Neurotica and Heartless) but I took them off of Amazon about 4 years ago. Full of mistakes. So awkward :blush: but now I'm doing a degree in Creative Writing in order to pin down skills like editing and self marketing to publishers so fingers crossed!! 

Thank you hon :love: :tighthug:
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mercixnekoxdoll9 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Hehe well fingers are definately crossed my love (: <3 ^-^ and no problem
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SECRET-NINJA-SUPER-M Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Incredible! The emotions especially are really well done! How many lines can be my favourite line? Can it be all of them?
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2015
:giggle: aaaaahh. You're too kind!
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Daghrgenzeen Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
This. :rose:
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2015
:love:
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Entraya Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
What is the written equivalent of a like a 'wow' sort of silence? that was very well written

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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2015
:blush: Oh gosh thank you :love: You're so sweet!
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
omg that was breathtakingly gorgeous, everything about it :love: You did such an amazing job with this prompt :la:
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2015
:giggle: Aw thank you honey!
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
It sure has some vivid imagery. Neat :)
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PoetryOD Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2015
:D Thanks!! <3
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Hehe, no problem :)
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